WEEK 10: I wish I could see you

Prompted by:ย MF


He reaches for her.

Like he always does.

He finds her elbow, cradles it, then lingers there.

Like he always does.

Heย steps forward, hesitates, then rocks back onto his heels.

Like he always does.

He grunts in frustration, shakes his head, then frowns.

Like he always does.

As for her?

She holds her breath, waiting for him to move.

Like she always does.

Slowly, a calloused hand slides up the back of her arm. Skims over her shoulder. Sweeps around the column of her neck.

She watches his lips part, close, then part again.

And still holds her breath, waiting for him to speak.

Like she always does.

At last, he says, “Tell me.”

At last, she breathes, “What?”

“About your eyes.”

“You know they’re brown,” she whispers.

“Describe them.”

“I can’t.”

His fingers burrow into her hair. “Try.”

“I really can’t.”

“Please, try.”

“Brown is just brown,” she explains softly.

His face hardens, the square of his jaw visibly tightening.

A long stretch of silence.

And then, “I wish I could see you.”

It always comes back to this.

Every. Single. Time.

He just doesn’t get it, does he?

With an exasperated sigh, she pulls away. Grabs him by the wrist. Presses his palm firmly to her chest.

“What are you doing?” he asks.

Ignoring his question, she replies with her own, “Do you feel that?”

He arches a brow. “Your breast?”

She rolls her eyes. “My heart, you pervert.”

Finally, he breaks into a crooked grin. “Yeah, I feel it.”

“Then you see me.”


What’s the prompt for next week, guys?ย 

Make suggestions below. 7 words or less.

23 thoughts on “WEEK 10: I wish I could see you

    1. Hahaha! Thanks, Miss Lesley!! What’s she supposed to say, right? My eyes are the color of chocolate? Dirt? Poop?

      Dude: I ain’t seen any of that stuff either, babe.

      Girl: Communication fail.


      1. Hahahaha love this. There’s only so much you can use for brown. I mean- blue and green there are different pretty things to compare it to but… Eh

        Great job with fun prompt.

        1. I know, right?? Ah, Jersey girl…thanks for getting me…

          And thank you kindly for reading, of course!!!


  1. Prompt ideas:
    So….this is me.
    Would you hand me my…
    What do you mean by that?
    Can you not touch that, please.
    Wake up, I need you.
    I don’t think you understand me.
    I’m sensitive about this/that.
    Are you ready for this?
    Let’s do this!
    Does it bother you when they stare?

    1. More ideas…
      Go ahead, ask me about it.
      No, I’m staring at you.
      Are you sure about this?
      I would never doubt your skills.
      I would never doubt you.
      You, me, together?

      1. Dang it, woman! How do you think of so many prompts???

        *lobotomizes Lesley**peers inside at brain**nods affirmatively*

        Just as I thought. Very, very wrinkly ๐Ÿ˜‰

    2. *lobotomizes Lesley**peers into brain**nods affirmatively*

      Just as I thought. Very, very wrinkly ๐Ÿ˜‰

  2. I really enjoyed the story.
    It is also amazing how different stories with the same title and topic can be!
    I am already curious about next week.

    My ideas:
    You are never too old for…
    I always wanted to so this!
    A penny for your thoughts
    Sometimes I wonder…

    1. Yessss!! I totally agree about the same-topics-different-stories phenomenon. Okay, it’s not a phenomenon. I’m just being dramatic ๐Ÿ˜‰

      Thank you very much for reading, Miss Cat! And commenting! And suggesting (awesome) prompts!


  3. Ohmygoodness so cute. I like her matter-of-factness. Brown is brown is brown. ๐Ÿ™‚

    Prompts –
    “He’s everywhere”
    “It was less awkward than I expected”
    “Is it worth it?”

    1. Thanks, Miss Laura!! Yeah, brown is definitely brown, eh? Tee hee

      Ahhh, the prompts! Yessss!!!! Much appreciated!!!


  4. A great take as usual!! This week’s prompt could have easily become overly sweet or/and melodramatic but I think you successfully avoided it!
    I was so positively surprised that you didn’t finish with this sentence: “He just doesnโ€™t get it, does he?” (although this could have also been an ending) because after that the story got real good! Your ending was like a punchline – unexpected and deep!
    Thank you!

    1. Awww, thank you, SC!

      I love ending on a punchline so I’m glad you dug it!! And yes, that totally would’ve been another good place to stop, eh? It’d have saved me an extra minute of writing time too ๐Ÿ˜›


      P.S. – *glares at overly sweet and melodramatic* ๐Ÿ˜‰

  5. As always I loved this!! I vote for sometimes I wonder btw… Just sayin.
    My prompty ideas:

    Why does it do that?

    When…when will you be ready?


    I don’t think that goes there.

    It’s just a little…

    Maybe one day…

    1. Pfft! *goes on an unnecessary power trip* This ain’t no democracy!! Yeah, okay, I’ll consider it ๐Ÿ˜› Although, I gotta say I love one of yours too:


      And thank you, Miss AnRo!!


      1. Hahahaha. I didn’t say you must, I said what my vote “would” be “if” I had a vote in this “non democracy” hahahahahaha!!! But yes the NO. Is a good one too. Lol

          1. Hahahahaha. This is why we get along well, I play along even if it isn’t the appropriate time. Lmao

            So anywho:
            What do you mean?

            Why not now?

            But I want it…


  6. Sorry about overly sweet/melodramatic – I couldn’t find the word to describe what I meant (I’m not the writer, you know!! ๐Ÿ™‚ )!
    BTW, for some reason I like the new cover to HB much more! ๐Ÿ™‚ Can’t wait for Book Two in the series! ๐Ÿ™‚

    1. Hahaha, sc! Don’t apologize!! I was glaring at sweet and melodramatic, not at you for saying it. Sooo in other words…

      I was making a joke and failed as usual ๏˜‚๏˜‚๏˜‚๏˜‚๏˜‚LMAO!!!

      You’re not a writer, eh? Is that a challenge? Cuz I’m good at dragging the writer outta people. They don’t even kick and scream. Well, not TOO much ๐Ÿ˜›

      And thank you!! I’m always nervous changing something that’s already working, so I’m thrilled you dig the new cover better!

      As for book two, stay tuned for an “announcement”. Although, it might not be one you like…

      *looks around nervously*

      Nah, it’s no biggie LOL! But I’ll do up a post maybe Friday and let everyone know ๐Ÿ™‚


      P.S. – How in the world did I end up writing so much in this comment???

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